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UL A new book
« on: July 02, 2013, 10:21 PM »
I am an author writing a book and I was wandering if this beginning grabs your attention. Please comment to let me know your thought. I have not written much yet but here is what I want your thought on. The Forgotten is the improved version and is longer.
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Re: A new book
« Reply #1 on: July 02, 2013, 10:27 PM »
Are you looking for this to be edited for typos?
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Re: A new book
« Reply #2 on: July 02, 2013, 10:35 PM »
Not yet. I just want to know if its interesting.
 

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Re: A new book
« Reply #3 on: July 03, 2013, 12:07 AM »
It's too short !
I want to know what comes next !

I actually liked it, it's a good start, and quite easy to read and understand, which means you won't loose your readers in the beginning, by trying too hard. I'd say it's perfect.
Please keep on writing...   ^-^
 

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Re: A new book
« Reply #4 on: July 03, 2013, 12:12 AM »
If you want to follow my writing progress i would love for you to kind of be like an assistant make sure my im not boring readers. if you would like that then please leave your email and I will send my writing your way.
 

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Re: A new book
« Reply #5 on: July 03, 2013, 10:43 AM »
Your story has promise and I can see your future as an author.  There are a lot of spelling and a few grammar errors that make it hard to read.  For instance "threw" should be "through".  Double spacing would help.  Some shorter paragraphs would also help make your story  easier for the reader.  That said, I know this is just the first draft, and your story is exciting.  I found myself anxious to learn more. 

Wishing you success.
Please excuse any spelling errors.   I have dyslexic fingers!
 

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