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Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« on: January 14, 2013, 04:02 PM »
Ok folks, list em here. Fics that you have flounced, and why you flounced them. Help keep others apprised of the good, the bad, and the badly edited. :-*

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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #1 on: January 14, 2013, 04:34 PM »
I went through my review history just to find this one!

"Baby your the one" by XCarlie.CullenX
I read it so long ago, I honestly don't remember specifics on why I flounced, but I'll post the review I wrote here:

"Oh, please, please, please get a beta. Or read through each chapter at least once. The first paragraph contains two sentences and is the same length as a normal six sentence paragraph. The title is also "Baby YOU'RE the One." I'm 100% positive that at least ten people didn't read your story due to the misuse of the word "your."

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wRItiNG liKE THis iS NoT atTRActiVE, nOr pROFesSioNaL."
After a quick skim through the first chapter, I noticed that she just doesn't have punctuation for ANY of her quotes, which really bothers me. Not sure if it gets any better through later chapters, but I could not stand to read or enjoy the story, because the grammar was too horrendous..... Also, if you didn't understand the last line of my review, all of her A/Ns at the end were written lIkE tHiS

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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #2 on: January 14, 2013, 04:42 PM »
Haha I found another one that was EVEN WORSE.

It's The Bet by XintoxicatedxbyxTwilightX

It's so bad I only need to post the first paragraph.

"I was on my way to lunch, my favorite time of the day. I was freaking starving...i met up with Angela and Ben. They were my two closest friends. I got in line to buy my lunch, i decided to go with something healthy and grabbed a salad and some lemonade. I sat down at our usual table, Angela and Ben were there talking about a upcoming date. I zoned out...i looked three tables down, at the "popular" kids table. Were my old best friend now sat...Jessica. Me and her were best friends but then she got asked out by a popular kid and she hadnt spoken to me since. I didnt blame her, i was a outsider and the "invisable" girl at our school. She was currently sitting on the lap of non other than Edward Cullen. Yes thee "Edward Cullen". The biggest player at our school. His reputation didnt make him a easy goin guy, all the girls always swooned over him. I didnt see what was so special about him? I sat next to him everyday in biology. He did have a nice family though, i somewhat talked to his sister Alice in spanish. She was really nice to me even though she hung out with them. I couldnt help but feel empty while i stared at the table, i missed Jessica. She had been my best friend since 7th grade. We were now seniors. And it hurt to see her get all worked up about a guy who had a reputation such as Edwards. He usually dates em, then beds em, then dumps em. And i didnt want that to happen to her. I had only taken a bite from my salad when the bell rang for 6th period. I picked up my bottle of lemonade and threw away my salad. I had biology next, the only class i had with Edward...he sat right next to me, but thankfully he never talked to me."

Yes, this is copied verbatim. Yes, this is the first paragraph ONLY. Yes, this story really does have over 1,000 reviews (from people ranting about her grammar, I suspect).

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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #3 on: January 14, 2013, 05:42 PM »
A Delicate Line by DarkNNerdy

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I didn't flounce, read the entire thing. And was PISSED with the ending. This is labeled as suspense/humor and while there are some funny parts this fic is horror/tragedy. Hands down.

There were too many plot lines left unresolved...almost all were unresolved. And she kills off who the reader is lead to believe is Bella....though it's NEVER stated who the hell died. And the manner in which Bella died (if it was her) was a total  :wtf: This is one of the first fics where I've been truly disappointed by the ending after such a good build up for 100K words.

 

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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #4 on: January 14, 2013, 11:25 PM »
Anything by this author.  I just can't...I'm sorry.  When I once reviewed and suggested getting a beta, or at least a pre-reader who could help with her English, I got such a nasty response (more like a rant) and then she pulled the story anyway.  It gave me whiplash!   

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« Last Edit: January 14, 2013, 11:26 PM by 2loveybunnies »
Thanks to all those who have shared stories with me, and "you're welcome" to those who have enjoyed mine!
 

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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #5 on: January 15, 2013, 03:23 AM »
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A Delicate Line by DarkNNerdy

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I didn't flounce, read the entire thing. And was PISSED with the ending. This is labeled as suspense/humor and while there are some funny parts this fic is horror/tragedy. Hands down.

There were too many plot lines left unresolved...almost all were unresolved. And she kills off who the reader is lead to believe is Bella....though it's NEVER stated who the hell died. And the manner in which Bella died (if it was her) was a total  :wtf: This is one of the first fics where I've been truly disappointed by the ending after such a good build up for 100K words.
You took the words right out of my mouth.  There were some good ideas but they were never followed up.  The story is hard to follow as it switches about with no indication of who is speaking. The end was exactly as you have said, and the spelling and grammar bad. Like you I persevered to the end hoping for some answers. ???
 

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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #6 on: January 15, 2013, 04:25 AM »
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Anything by this author.  I just can't...I'm sorry.  When I once reviewed and suggested getting a beta, or at least a pre-reader who could help with her English, I got such a nasty response (more like a rant) and then she pulled the story anyway.  It gave me whiplash!   

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I flounced her fics as well.
 

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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #7 on: January 15, 2013, 05:36 AM »

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Sins of My Past
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Bella was left by Edward to clean up the ruins of her life after his betrayal. What happens when Edward finds out that not all was as it seems. What are the consequences of his sins and what will he do to get her back?

I heard  lot about this fic before but recently in other thread some one mentioned it so  tried.Needless to say after 4 chapter i flounced it. infact if you read in 1st paragraph  of second chapter ,You can easily say that writing of this story is completely immuture & stupid & unrealisitcs.  Characters are so unnatural that i dont have words.

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P.S:- its has 88 somthing  chapter, after reading 4 chapter i wanted kill someone I dont know how can anyone read 88 chapter of this mindless story.I guess others can read since it has like 10 k reviews. :o :o :o

P.P.S:- bella having edward's baby & than their reunion after years kind of stories are always cringeworthy. Hardly any author does justice to concept.anything close to perfect i have read is Secret & lies. even SAL  has some flaw still it is  well-develop story.
 

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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #8 on: January 15, 2013, 07:02 AM »
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Sins of My Past
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Bella was left by Edward to clean up the ruins of her life after his betrayal. What happens when Edward finds out that not all was as it seems. What are the consequences of his sins and what will he do to get her back?

I heard  lot about this fic before but recently in other thread some one mentioned it so  tried.Needless to say after 4 chapter i flounced it. infact if you read in 1st paragraph  of second chapter ,You can easily say that writing of this story is completely immuture & stupid & unrealisitcs.  Characters are so unnatural that i dont have words.

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P.S:- its has 88 somthing  chapter, after reading 4 chapter i wanted kill someone I dont know how can anyone read 88 chapter of this mindless story.I guess others can read since it has like 10 k reviews. :o :o :o

P.P.S:- bella having edward's baby & than their reunion after years kind of stories are always cringeworthy. Hardly any author does justice to concept.anything close to perfect i have read is Secret & lies. even SAL  has some flaw still it is  well-develop story.

I flounced that as well.
So nice to see that some people think the same as I do.
 

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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #9 on: January 15, 2013, 08:06 AM »
I'm going with anything written by mamasutra.  Don't get me wrong I don't think that she is a terrible writer , however, all she writes about is cheating and it's mostly Edward ALWAYS cheating on Bella.  I actually wrote her a message because she recently wrote a story that was flagged edward&bella edward&leah.  Of course Edward is cheating on Bella with Leah (which btw makes my stomach roll but to each it's own).  I asked her to please mark a story Edward & Leah, so I know to stay away from it. I personally just took her off my alerts because honestly I don't mind a cheating story.  But really that's all she writes.  And after a while how many stories can a person really read about cheating from the same author it's like all the same. :(
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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #10 on: January 15, 2013, 08:15 AM »

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Sins of My Past
Author: content1  PM
Bella was left by Edward to clean up the ruins of her life after his betrayal. What happens when Edward finds out that not all was as it seems. What are the consequences of his sins and what will he do to get her back?

I heard  lot about this fic before but recently in other thread some one mentioned it so  tried.Needless to say after 4 chapter i flounced it. infact if you read in 1st paragraph  of second chapter ,You can easily say that writing of this story is completely immuture & stupid & unrealisitcs.  Characters are so unnatural that i dont have words.

Sorry but you are not allowed to view spoiler contents.

P.S:- its has 88 somthing  chapter, after reading 4 chapter i wanted kill someone I dont know how can anyone read 88 chapter of this mindless story.I guess others can read since it has like 10 k reviews. :o :o :o

P.P.S:- bella having edward's baby & than their reunion after years kind of stories are always cringeworthy. Hardly any author does justice to concept.anything close to perfect i have read is Secret & lies. even SAL  has some flaw still it is  well-develop story.

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I flounced that as well.
So nice to see that some people think the same as I do.

 :iagree: I heard a lot of people talking about that one, so I started reading it. It was a little all over the place, dealing with several issues at once
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barely paying attention to first, before moving to the next one. It seemed like forced angst after a point. I've definatelly read worse, but I've also read so much better fics dealing with such themes...
“Don't go fighting against the Spring.”
E.M. Forster, A Room with a View
 

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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #11 on: January 15, 2013, 08:41 AM »
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Anything by this author.  I just can't...I'm sorry.  When I once reviewed and suggested getting a beta, or at least a pre-reader who could help with her English, I got such a nasty response (more like a rant) and then she pulled the story anyway.  It gave me whiplash!   

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Not only that, but she keeps posting and pulling the same stories over and over.
 

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« Reply #12 on: January 15, 2013, 08:43 AM »
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I'm going with anything written by mamasutra.  Don't get me wrong I don't think that she is a terrible writer , however, all she writes about is cheating and it's mostly Edward ALWAYS cheating on Bella.  I actually wrote her a message because she recently wrote a story that was flagged edward&bella edward&leah.  Of course Edward is cheating on Bella with Leah (which btw makes my stomach roll but to each it's own).  I asked her to please mark a story Edward & Leah, so I know to stay away from it. I personally just took her off my alerts because honestly I don't mind a cheating story.  But really that's all she writes.  And after a while how many stories can a person really read about cheating from the same author it's like all the same. :(

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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #13 on: January 15, 2013, 08:48 AM »
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Ok I'm glad because I thought it was just me. :-*
 

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« Reply #14 on: January 15, 2013, 08:50 AM »
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Ok I'm glad because I thought it was just me. :-*

No, I kept trying to give her stories a chance but they're too depressing.
 

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« Reply #15 on: January 15, 2013, 08:55 AM »
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No, I kept trying to give her stories a chance but they're too depressing.

Same here :(
 

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« Reply #16 on: January 15, 2013, 09:19 AM »
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I'm going with anything written by mamasutra.  Don't get me wrong I don't think that she is a terrible writer , however, all she writes about is cheating and it's mostly Edward ALWAYS cheating on Bella.  I actually wrote her a message because she recently wrote a story that was flagged edward&bella edward&leah.  Of course Edward is cheating on Bella with Leah (which btw makes my stomach roll but to each it's own).  I asked her to please mark a story Edward & Leah, so I know to stay away from it. I personally just took her off my alerts because honestly I don't mind a cheating story.  But really that's all she writes.  And after a while how many stories can a person really read about cheating from the same author it's like all the same. :(

me too. I tried to read 1 of her story than i read somewhere that its not HEA for EB. Seriously you start 1st chapter with edward cheating than last chapter they are with diff partner. What is the point of such story?its only angst,angst & angst.

Her story pull me into depression mood  everytime i try to read.So i just avoid it.
 

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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #17 on: January 15, 2013, 10:07 AM »
 I hear you about Mamasutra. Try Covenant of Ash. It's got a HEA, and no cheating by Bella or Edward. And it's very moving, with some terrific characters. The ending is wonderful.

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A woman with nothing more to lose and a man who has lost everything come together under the disguise of an agreement as old as time and as sinful as flames that threaten to engulf them both. Will they find their salvation in each other or will this be another dream reduced to ashes from the fires that consume them? ******NOTE:THEY FIND THEIR SALVATION, NOT ASHES******
Twilight - Rated: M - English - Angst/Romance - Chapters: 147 - Words: 110,064 - Reviews: 5676 - Updated: 10-13-12 - Published: 7-2-12 - Bella & Edward - Complete
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« Reply #18 on: January 15, 2013, 10:10 AM »
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me too. I tried to read 1 of her story than i read somewhere that its not HEA for EB. Seriously you start 1st chapter with edward cheating than last chapter they are with diff partner. What is the point of such story?its only angst,angst & angst.

Her story pull me into depression mood  everytime i try to read.So i just avoid it.

Not only that there depressing, it's almost always Edward is cheating on Bella, how many different ways can u write the same-thing over and over and over again.  And speaking as a Edward/Bella fan. I don't mind reading one every once in a while but it's like all she ever writes is a cheating Edward.  If he is going to cheat can he have at the very least a different wife than Bella.  It just makes my stomach roll. At least that would make it different.
 

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« Reply #19 on: January 15, 2013, 10:12 AM »
this is going to be the best thread  >:D >:D >:D
 

 

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