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Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« on: January 14, 2013, 04:02 PM »
Ok folks, list em here. Fics that you have flounced, and why you flounced them. Help keep others apprised of the good, the bad, and the badly edited. :-*

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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #941 on: July 11, 2014, 11:40 AM »
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I totally agree that The Red Line is ok and in parts really good until Edward goes back. I mean, I have some issues about a lot of things they do in bed during their two weeks since it is so very obvious that Edward has been sexually abused in a horrible way, and even though he is the one pushing Bella, it feels like she is abusing him too by allowing him to. She lets him continue in a situation that is, for him, inseperably connected with abuse, without any emotional distance to said abuse to experience her fantasies, which left a horrible taste in my mouth. And I hate that she calls their interviews "therapy". She is clearly in no way qualified as a therapist (yet), nor has he agreed to therapy (just interviews!!), and it is so unethical that it is totally UN-BELIEVEABLE that she has sex with someone whom she considers as her patient. But when he goes back, it looses all sense of reality and believeability.

Because I was so dissapointed with the way it ended, I didn`t bother with the sequel. I`d like to know why you find it so bad, because otherwise, I might be tempted to try it anyway someday when I am bored out of my mind..

I read The Red Line years ago, and remember dropping EVERYTHING when an update popped up.  I was so mesmerized by the drama and the sensitive material way back then....now I think back and cringe when I think of that story's content.  I remember PM'ing the author asking how she thought it was possible for a man to do the things Edward did, or have that kind of stamina....thumper??  It was SO unrealistic, that now, just the thought of that story leaves a bad taste in my mouth.  That he can get an erection at all is a miracle, but the author makes his erections perpetual.  It's totally unbelievable, and really disturbing.  And the sequel....UGH!  I only skimmed most portions, but geez.  She went into detail about the 'training' he went through and the abuse and rape and captivity.  The things she came up with to describe his experiences makes me think the author is really a psychopath, as I have NO idea how those scenarios could even be IMAGINED!!  I mean, WHERE did she come up with those ideas???  It was pretty scary.  I would never want to meet her, and I'll never read anything else she writes.  On top of the fact that in the sequel, there is another woman that traps him in a basement and he freaks out.  It's like, no matter where he goes, women can't NOT leave him alone, and there will always be a woman near, that is THAT sadistic, that she will attack and hurt him....again - totally unbelievable it just made me want to gag.  Not only is there NO MAN that is totally irresistible, but there are few women that will really do the things that MOST ALL of them women did in those stories.  The author, imo, is nuts!!
 
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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #942 on: July 11, 2014, 12:16 PM »
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Hey there intrepid readers... I just a bunch of great stories, and being on a great run, I came across this one.... and I am not sure whether I should keep reading or not...

Has anyone read this yet????

Dissecting Edward by chynnadoll36  - Work in Progress
Edward is a 35 year old world renowned cardio-surgeon, husband and womanizer. He wants out of his marriage. His wife has other ideas. She hires the expertise of, Dr. Bella Swan, marriage therapist, to save their marriage. Is it a wise decision to bring the gorgeous Dr. Swan and your cheating husband together in hopes of fixing a failed marriage? AH E&B story rated M for LEMONS.
Rated: Fiction M - English - Hurt/Comfort/Romance - Bella & Edward - Chapters: 42 - Words: 167,296 - Reviews: 1,773 - Favs: 1,001 - Follows: 1,424 - Updated: 06-17-13 - Published: 07-14-12 - id: 8320680
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I love a s.o.b.-badward, and this Edward is certainly a piece of work.... if you don't like to read about Edward having meaningless sex with lots of women, don't even peek at this self-serving sex-addicted prickward.
I was quite amused by his bad-old-self, curious about what makes him tick... (besides his dick)
But then....
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Has anyone read past this point?
Does his past get magically erased once Bella enters his life?

I've got 30 more chapters to go... and I my spider BS sense is tingling. Can someone let me know if the next part
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If yes, I think I better flounce.
I can't stand:   'Bella's love effortlessly cures Edward's personality disorder/addiction/infidelity' storyline ..... especially for this over-the-top jerkward.
He needs to suffer before he is redeemed.... and I love reading about a prickward suffering for his past sins. I hate it when he gets a free pass just because he's Edward and she's Bella.
 Anyone? Anyone?

I skimmed this story, and I'm sorry, but I don't know how ANYONE could find one single redeeming quality in that Edward.  It was a HORRIBLE story, and the author yanked it after she ended the story on a cliffe.....sequel to come, I guess.  She got so many hateful reviews!!!!  I remember reading thinking.....she'll never be back, and I HOPE you never bothered putting your time or mind into that story.  It sooooo wasn't worth it!
 
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #943 on: July 11, 2014, 01:00 PM »
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I was barely able to finish MotU. Of course the fact that SQID was not happy about one of my comments (telling her that Bella didn't have time to really know Edward after only 6 or 7 weeks of just NOT ALLOWED like rabbits) and suggested me to stop reading her story didn't help me be particularly fond of it... I just wonder why she asked her readers to tell her what they thought of the chapters if she was not ready for something less than positively marveling at her work...

I had a similar experience with SQID.  I either reviewed or PM'd that it was so unrealistic that Bella would enter a contract into a BDSM relationship when she had NO idea, as a virgin, what a sexual relationship was like!  I think BDSM is for those who already have some sort of sexual foundation to form their 'tastes', and Edward, as a Dom, should know that.  So yeah, when I complained about the way Edward took her virginity (roughly), and that she agreed to such a ridiculous 'contract' without ANY experience, SQID told me to....move on.  None of my points were addressed, and I thought they were valid...
 
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #944 on: July 11, 2014, 01:17 PM »
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I Want My Life Back
Author: samekraemer  PM
Master Sergeant Edward Cullen achieved a very important goal…twenty years of active service to country. As one chapter ends, he's determined to achieve another important goal…to get back the people he left behind in its pursuit. AH/AH. EPOV. Canon couples, but not in the canon way. Rated M…language, adult situations, citrus.
Follow/FavoriteRated: Fiction M - English - Romance/Angst - Bella, Edward - Chapters: 28 - Words: 149,131 - Reviews: 2,138 - Favs: 585 - Follows: 923 - Updated: 11-03-13 - Published: 10-08-13 - id: 9750606


I normally like her fics. But this one is pissing me off. I keep waiting to see if it gets better. It doesnt.

Edward is an absentee husband and father. They get divorced. And when he gets bored with his new life and decides he wants his family back... Its all easy for him. He is immediately forgiven for everything.

Also a couple of fics cliches. Jacob the bad guy. Bella the saint. And lots of unilateral decisions made that gives this fic a soap opera feeling.

The thing that really got me was that after so many years of marriage, they were able to give each other up!  I mean....they were each other's ONE & ONLY, and they were both able to move on with other people. Which totally destroyed the magic of what makes E&B...E&B!!  And furthermore, the REASON Bella divorced Edward made me want to choke her.  I mean...she got pregnant in HS, so he joined the military....giving up some of his dreams....so she decided to give HIM up....so CLICHE' and just, BAD!  It's like, she DESERVES to lose him if she's that stupid!  Yes, Edward definitely deserved the divorce because he was an a$$ sometimes, but Bella's martyristic personality just made me want to scream!  I wasted my time with this story.
 
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #945 on: July 22, 2014, 11:29 AM »
I'm reading Help Wanted by Jaxon 22 and I'm beginning to feel that flouncing it is almost inevitable.  The pacing is maddeningly slow.  I guess it's popular because of how many lemons there are in the story and the plot line is somewhat decent, but gah.  Get a move on!  I'm currently on chapter 30 and I'm not sure I can finish it.
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #946 on: July 22, 2014, 11:47 AM »
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I'm reading Help Wanted by Jaxon 22 and I'm beginning to feel that flouncing it is almost inevitable.  The pacing is maddeningly slow.  I guess it's popular because of how many lemons there are i nthe story and the plot line is somewhat decent, but gah.  get a move on.  I'm currently on chapter 30 and I'm not sure I can finish it.
It is one of my favorites. I'm a sucker for Actorward. That said, you won't be the first.  There is some excitement with Tanya nearer the end.  Skimming may be called for. ;)
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #947 on: July 22, 2014, 11:51 AM »
It's one of those fics that seems to be fairly highly recommended, not quite top 10 worthy, but well spoken of.  I want to give it a shot and I need to teach myself to brave reading some of the lemons anyways.  But yes, skimming might be in the works.
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #948 on: July 22, 2014, 01:06 PM »
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I'm reading Help Wanted by Jaxon 22 and I'm beginning to feel that flouncing it is almost inevitable.  The pacing is maddeningly slow.  I guess it's popular because of how many lemons there are in the story and the plot line is somewhat decent, but gah.  Get a move on!  I'm currently on chapter 30 and I'm not sure I can finish it.

This is going to sound crazy, since so many of us have been avoiding WIP stories, but I think some stories are better when read in small increments instead of straight through.  Weaknesses in the writing aren't as obvious in small doses.

Bottom line - we can't win!   :D

 
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #949 on: July 22, 2014, 01:08 PM »
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It's one of those fics that seems to be fairly highly recommended, not quite top 10 worthy, but well spoken of.  I want to give it a shot and I need to teach myself to brave reading some of the lemons anyways.  But yes, skimming might be in the works.
I tend to skim lemons on a normal basis, so unless there's an excessive amount,  I don't always notice it.  I really don't remember Help Wanted being excessively lemony. However, don't bother with Lola-Pops trilogy if you don't like lemons. They are everywhere. :P
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #950 on: July 22, 2014, 01:20 PM »
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I tend to skim lemons on a normal basis, so unless there's ans excessive amount,  I don't always notice it.  I really don't remember Help Wanted being excessively lemony. However, don't bother with Lola-Pops trilogy if you don't like lemons. They are everywhere. :P

You mean the Lola Shoes trilogy? *shrug* Lemons are almost an inevitability in the fandom. Adapt or die I guess.
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #951 on: July 22, 2014, 01:46 PM »
I don't mind lemons, I just get bored when the story seems to be nothing but lemons strung together with just the barest hint of plot. I need plot!
 
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #952 on: July 22, 2014, 02:13 PM »
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I don't mind lemons, I just get bored when the story seems to be nothing but lemons strung together with just the barest hint of plot. I need plot!

I agree. I think a proper placed lemon (or lime) can be a wonderful thing, but I keep running into fics that are just consecutive lemons.  It's rather annoying.
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #953 on: July 22, 2014, 02:28 PM »
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This is going to sound crazy, since so many of us have been avoiding WIP stories, but I think some stories are better when read in small increments instead of straight through.  Weaknesses in the writing aren't as obvious in small doses.

Bottom line - we can't win!   :D
LOL! I've been doing this with the Lola-SHOES trilogy ( yeah, I get them all mixed up)  Too many lemons. But enough story that you want to continue.  Just with breaks.  ;)
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« Reply #954 on: July 23, 2014, 04:35 PM »
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I read The Red Line years ago, and remember dropping EVERYTHING when an update popped up.  I was so mesmerized by the drama and the sensitive material way back then....now I think back and cringe when I think of that story's content.  I remember PM'ing the author asking how she thought it was possible for a man to do the things Edward did, or have that kind of stamina....thumper??  It was SO unrealistic, that now, just the thought of that story leaves a bad taste in my mouth.  That he can get an erection at all is a miracle, but the author makes his erections perpetual.  It's totally unbelievable, and really disturbing.  And the sequel....UGH!  I only skimmed most portions, but geez.  She went into detail about the 'training' he went through and the abuse and rape and captivity.  The things she came up with to describe his experiences makes me think the author is really a psychopath, as I have NO idea how those scenarios could even be IMAGINED!!  I mean, WHERE did she come up with those ideas???  It was pretty scary.  I would never want to meet her, and I'll never read anything else she writes.  On top of the fact that in the sequel, there is another woman that traps him in a basement and he freaks out.  It's like, no matter where he goes, women can't NOT leave him alone, and there will always be a woman near, that is THAT sadistic, that she will attack and hurt him....again - totally unbelievable it just made me want to gag.  Not only is there NO MAN that is totally irresistible, but there are few women that will really do the things that MOST ALL of them women did in those stories.  The author, imo, is nuts!!

I also read The Red Line years ago. I really liked the story back then. I definitely don't like the story anymore. I don't like the sequel either.
 
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #955 on: July 23, 2014, 04:42 PM »
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I don't mind lemons, I just get bored when the story seems to be nothing but lemons strung together with just the barest hint of plot. I need plot!

I don't mind lemons either, but there definitely needs to be plot as well. If there are only lemons, then it is too much.
 
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« Reply #956 on: July 24, 2014, 10:44 PM »
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I don't mind lemons either, but there definitely needs to be plot as well. If there are only lemons, then it is too much.

After finishing Breaking Dawn back in 2011 I was a sucker for lemons! The more the better! BD left me quite unsatisfied...  8) Now I'm getting more and more annoyed with lemons. I skim a lot of them and tend to flounce stories with too many lemons. I flounced the Lola-shoes trilogy after just a few chapters because of that.
 
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« Reply #957 on: July 25, 2014, 07:17 AM »
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After finishing Breaking Dawn back in 2011 I was a sucker for lemons! The more the better! BD left me quite unsatisfied...  8) Now I'm getting more and more annoyed with lemons. I skim a lot of them and tend to flounce stories with too many lemons. I flounced the Lola-shoes trilogy after just a few chapters because of that.
I've only been able to read it by skimming lemons and taking breaks every few chapters to read something else. There's a decent story under all the lemons, but you really have to dig for it at times.  :P
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #958 on: September 01, 2014, 09:44 PM »
Should have stopped after the first ten repeats....

Planet Twilight

I love sci fi...so I tried to keep an open mind

Lots of repeat lemons, and sooo much description of cooking, cleaning, sewing, knitting
Some one tries and fails to kidnap bella, again and again
Story could have been told in one chapter, for what little there was
Only thing different was Tanya raping an anesthesized Edward and having his kid.

Not worth the read, waste of space
 
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Re: Flounced Fics (Twilight fanfiction)
« Reply #959 on: September 03, 2014, 06:16 PM »
Charlie's by Sugar334

Flounced because while the plot was decent, the grammar was terrible. There are run on sentences that just keep going. By the end of the sentence, you completely forgot what the start said. A good beta would be all this fic would need for me to go back to it.
 
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Re: Flounced Fics
« Reply #960 on: October 20, 2014, 05:23 PM »
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I skimmed this story, and I'm sorry, but I don't know how ANYONE could find one single redeeming quality in that Edward.  It was a HORRIBLE story, and the author yanked it after she ended the story on a cliffe.....sequel to come, I guess.  She got so many hateful reviews!!!!  I remember reading thinking.....she'll never be back, and I HOPE you never bothered putting your time or mind into that story.  It sooooo wasn't worth it!

Sigh, thanks for letting me know I wasn't PMSing when I wrote that review. I had issues with 50 shades, but I still loved Fifty. Dissectingward should be dismembered and set on fire.

I got drawn back when I heard the outcry about the "cliffie/pull/oh hey thar ....buy my book" thing.  For some reason, I am more invested in Edward and Bella in fanfic form, than characters in a regular book: like I somehow need to 'approve' of how the author is making the characters 'dance', or profiting from them.

It's like ExB are 'mine'. Lol. (don't worry: I share!)

I have to say I think what bothers me about Dissecting Edward is exactly what makes me angry in The Red Line.  There's a between-the-lines bad smell that comes across as disdain of their 'own' ExB characters. It's like Edward is this dark hero, going through the trials of redemption, but the satisfying redemption never actually happens: only more idiotic crap. I get the feeling the writers don't actually like ExB.

This gets me upset because I feel like 'my' Edward is being mistreated by being forced into a fanfic character I don't like. I see him in my head and he's been forced to do what now? The h ... elll!?!?!?

Um, that's crazy, right?

I think fanfic is a great place for new writers to play with 'stock' characters in any which way the writer sees fit: they may get some tomatoes thrown at them, but that's how it is on the WWW stage. It's a good way to learn why you should respect your readers, and why writers should honor the social contract. That contract is really strong is fandoms like Twilight.  Writers can do what they want to poor Edward, as long as they make their intentions clear, and they don't abuse the reader's good faith and expectations.

If the author fundamentally dislikes the canon, however, you can get a sense of it in how they treat the fandom readers: indifferent to our pain,  followed by a shouty-cap flounce.

I'm not saying writers 'owe' their readers, but you can tell when a writer knows they are pushing the fandom envelope by the way they treat their audience. Some know enough to post warnings, and some writers clearly don't give a damn, and to their peril. Most smart writers will say "I haven't finished this, but I plan to post bi-weekly," or "this has cheating" or even a consoling messages about a cliffie and a promise when the next update will be (and delivering on that promise). Readers might be freaking out, but if the author is smart they will recognize 'what' freaks us out, and address it.

Then there's the huffy and dismissive behavior, say like .... chynnadoll36. That train-wreck cliffie to book-pitch flounce was .... conniving.

In The Red Line, I thought the author was punishing Edward with his relationship with Bella, in which Bella seemed to play a role in his humiliation, just like all the other women in Edward's Red Line life. That's fine because the author never tried to capitalize off the fandom.  She has the right to write what ever she wants because it's (free) fanfic, and you could tell by the frank way she wrote, she wasn't going to pull any punches. What you saw was what you got. I personally didn't like it, but I will admit I read it, and it feels like it was a big part of the twicracfandom, like it or not.  TBH: the ending made sense for the story. At least we got an ending ....

I got the feeling that with Dissecting Edward, the author had planned the cliffie-to-book-push from the get go. I felt like it was a set up, and this bothers me even more than her despicable treatment of my Edward errr.... her characterization.

I do not have these warm fuzzy feelings for chynnadoll36. I think it's mutual when it comes to the twifandom. I honestly think we deserve better treatment as fans and readers.

I knew the fic was going to be bad, but that flounce stunt? The old bait and switch to P2P enrages me. 

As far as the story goes .... even when it's bad ... it's weirdly kind of good? It's like fanfic is reality TV: my expectations are waaaay different. I expect my books to be like HBO, but fanfic can be campy and dumb and I might shake my fist or roll my eyes, but I am not giving it up. Too much fun. And when they get 'my' Edward right and the writing's good? There's nothing better!

The good news is is Dissecting Despicable Edward was free, and there are plenty of books and fanfic in the sea.  ;D

.... and maybe chynnadoll36 could put out a amazing fan fic, and allll is forgiven.  ;)
(I won't hold my breath.)
 
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