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Offline airybeautygirl

Help me with my description please!
« on: September 29, 2012, 08:55 AM »
Hi guys! This is what I came up with .

The memory of the amazing concert was still fresh in my mind, replaying itself again and again like a _________

What should I write for the missing part? :(
Or should I just leave it as
"replaying itself again and again." ?

or you guys could help me reword or rephrase it to become even better! :)
« Last Edit: September 29, 2012, 09:44 AM by airybeautygirl »
 

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Offline 4myeyesonly

Re: Help me with my description please!
« Reply #1 on: September 30, 2012, 07:43 PM »
broken record

beautiful dream



 

bitsybee

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Re: Help me with my description please!
« Reply #2 on: September 30, 2012, 08:07 PM »
The memory of the amazing concert was still fresh in my mind, replaying itself again and again like...
...an echo, gently fading, no matter how hard I tried to hold on.

Firewings is right. "Echo" on its own doesn't sound right.
« Last Edit: September 30, 2012, 08:09 PM by Bitsy »
 

Offline GG drypen!

Re: Help me with my description please!
« Reply #3 on: September 30, 2012, 08:15 PM »
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The memory of the amazing concert was still fresh in my mind, replaying itself again and again like...
...an echo, gently fading, no matter how hard I tried to hold on.

Firewings is right. "Echo" on its own doesn't sound right.

How about:

The memory of the amazing concert was still fresh in my mind, replaying itself again and again, looping through my conscious like a beautiful dream.
 

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